Black Ghost

It's not too short; there's such a thing as flash fiction. ;) But even though I really loved the vivid imagery, I didn't really get a sense of the point ...

Hey Kylan. ^_^ I read Honor #1 to understand what was happening in #2, and I must say I enjoyed both of them. I love the way that you set ...

Like Amelia said above, I really didn't feel as much a connection with the characters and the situation as much as I wanted to. I'm not sure what's missing, whether ...

Nice poem. Although you had a typo here: A song you know to well. Should be too . Also, I noticed that the repetition of "starry sky" didn't work so ...

In order to get more critiques, you're going to have to space this out a bit more. Make sure you have a space between paragraphs and pieces of dialogue. This ...

It was good poem, in my opinion, although maybe a few lines could be changed. Actually, I think this one: authorizing the mind to control his muscles. There isn't anything ...

Hey there! Nice story you have here. The think I enjoyed the most was your voice, it seemed to flow especially well when I was reading. As for the story, ...

Hey Claudette! Very awesome story in my opinion. :wink: I only found a few typos and things, since it's very well written. He shouted, “I didn’t do it.” The driver ...

‘I’m done with helping you’re kind,’ he finished bitterly. Typo there. Should be your . That's about the only thing I found, you edit very well. :) On the story ...

Hey Phorcys, I finally got around to critting this. :lol: So! Hope this helps somewhat. :P Slizik smiled paternally while he looked around the corridor. Prime and Dawson Limited was ...

Hey, Areida! :D Not only is this an awesome example of Quiet Horror, it's a great piece of fiction in any sense. The way that you incorporate all the things ...

Hey Jiggity! Here's one-half of your critique. Nice piece by the way. :P I said I would give an "in-depth" critique, so I thought breaking it up would help accomplish ...

Hey, kirstybree! Interesting romance story so far, and I really like the voice that you use, it let's us really get into your characters head. Beyond that, here are a ...

His collection seemed so very small, he didn't often get the chance to get the chance to make marbles, and he hadn't been able to get his hands on one ...

Hey, author13. :D Your pieces are always very interesting, and I like how you attempt to tackle drama in a refreshing way. But, there are still parts you can improve ...